सीन बाई सीन देखिये फिल्म राब्स ..बिना पर्दे का

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एक फिल्म स्क्रीप्ट डिस्पले कर रहा हूं…फिल्म का नाम है
राब्स, इसके साथ नीचे में इनवर्टेड कौमा में लिखा हुआ है, अपराध जगत में एक प्रयोगवादी जज...अब खुद देख लिजीये यह जज कितना प्रयोगवादी है....यह जैसा है वैसे ही रखने जा रहा हूं....एक एक सीन रखता जाऊंगा... वर्तमान सीन से आगे बढ़ कर सीन बताने वालो का स्वागत है, वैसे इसको पढ़ने का मजा तो हर कोई उठा ही सकता है। स्क्रीप्ट लेखन टेक्निक के लिहाज से यह मुझे कुछ उम्दा लगा और स्क्रीप्ट लेखन में कैरियर बनाने की इच्छा रखने वालों के लिए यह निसंदेह सहायक हो सकता है। स्क्रीप्ट लेखन से संबंधित किसी भी स्तर के कोई भी प्रश्न आप यहां दाग सकते हैं....आपके सवालों और सुझावों का स्वागत है।

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तो शुरु हो रहा है राब्स...बिना टिकट के ही इसका मजा लिजीये....।
(इसे एक फिल्म का विशुद्ध रूप से प्रचार स्टाइल माना जाये, (फिल्मों के प्रचार स्टाईल का अपना एक तरीका है, ) हालांकि कि यह फिल्म बनी ही नहीं है, और फिलहाल बनने की भी कोई गुंजाईश नहीं है, (इससे स्क्रीप्ट पर कोई फर्क नहीं पड़ता है) .......तो देखना न भूलिये राब्स... इयता पर आ रहा है.....हर शुक्रवार सुबह, नौ बजे.....रहस्य, रोमांच और बेवकूफी पूर्ण हरकतों से भरपूर....राब्स.......
( नोट - लिखने के दौरान स्क्रीप्ट ग्रामर व्यवहारिकतौर पर का कठोरता से पालन किया गया है)
Scene1
Characters---Justice Ramesh Pant and Bhandari.
Ent/night/ Study room
( A table is full of Law books, there are four almiras full of different books. Nearly 34 years old Judge Pant is sitting in an arm chair and writing his diary under a burning lamp. Bhandari, 40 years, sitting on a chair out side room and dozing)
Pant
(His pen is running very fast and his mind is full of thoughts, dialogues without lips movement, better to say VO—Voice Over)

Pichale 9 sal se main chor-badmashon ko gawahon aur sabuton ke adhar per saja suna raha hun. Kaya naya ki yeh prakriya kargar hai? Yadi hai to abatak samaj se aparadh ko samapat ho jana chahiye tha…akasar yehi dekha jata hai ki chota aparadhi jail jane ke bad ek bara aparadhi ban jata hai. Hum aparadhi ko saja dete hai. Un paristhition ki partal nahi karate jo logo ka aparadhi banata hai. Aisa lagata hai jaise naya ki prakriya me shamil sabhi log nind me unghate huye safar kar rahe hai.

(Bhandari during dozing fells down from the chair and having managed himself he sits on the chair and again starts dozing. Meanwhile Pant’s pen is running with its own speed )

in unghate logon me main bhi to shamil hun. Aparadh ko samjhane ke liye yeh jaruri hai ki hum aparadh ki taftish karane ke bajaye insani jindagi ki tafatish kare.

(An old watch hanging over the wall starts ringing. Pant stops writing and looks at the watch The watch shows that it 12 o’ clock. Pant is in night gown. He makes his body eaisy and looks at the door.Bhandari runs fast to the kitchen and inters into the room with a glass of milk.Pant looks at his face with some uneasy feeling )

Pant
Ghari ki oor dekho.
(Bhandari looks at the watch with his sleepy eyes)
Bhandari

Ji sahab dekh raha hun.
Pant
Kitane baje hai?

Bhandari
Barah.

Pant
Barah nahi, Barah bajkar tin minutes…Aaj tumane phir tin minutes ki der kar di..Tumhe pata hai main thik barah baje dudh pita hun…subah ki shurat ka pahala pal.

Bhandari

Ji sahab.

Pant
Prakriti ka pana ek niyam hai …aur insan ko prakriti se tal-mel banane ke liye niyam se chalana chahiye.

Bhandari
Ji sahab (still dozing)…Sahib ( with some hesitation)
(Gilas khali karane ke bad Pant wapas use Bhandari ko deta hai)
Pant
Kuch kahana chahate ho? …Beshak kaho…bolane ki swatantrata! …Puri duniya ki pragati isi per to tiki hui hai.
Bhandari
Sabab, ab aapako shadi kar leni chahiye.
Pant
Shadi ! u mean marriage ! …tumane ki hai?
Bhandari
Tabhi to kah raha hun sahab…mem sahab aa jayegi to aapaki jindi badal jayegi…bibi bahut achi chij hai.
(Pant ki aankho ke samane court ka scene ghumane lagata hai)

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Scene 2

2A
Characters—Pant, Raja, Rani, Gupata, Two advocates and five other people.
Int/ day/ Court room.
(Raja with his folded hands is standing in the witness box. An advocate is beside him. Gupta is just sitting under the desk. He is very much busy with some files. Rani and others five people are sitting in the row. The second advocate is sitting besides Rani)
Raja
(With his folded hands) Hujur aap mujhe gaur se dhekhiye …Aap ko lagata hai ki main ise pit sakata hun? ( Denoting to Rani) Hujur mera kasur sirf itana hai ki main anpar hun aur mere gharwalon ne meri shadi is pari-likhi aurat se kara di….isase puchiye sahab …yeh mujhe angregi me gali deti hai.
(All the people present in the court laugh. Pant, too, smiles)
Sahab aap mujhe phansi per chara dijiye..Jail bhej dijiye…main sari umra jail me gujarane ke liye tayar hun..lekin is aurat ke sath main nahi rah sakata.

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2B
The same characters and set-up of the scene 2A. Now Rani is standing in the witness box in stead of Raja)

Rani
My lord, is adami ne meri puri jindagi narak kar di hai…naye gahane dena to dur is adami ne mere sare gahane bech diye…main kosati hun us pal ko jab isase meri shadi huai thi..Ab is adami ke sath main jindagi ka ek pal bhi nahi kat sakati….muje isake sath nahi rahana hai…isake sath rahane se acha hai ki main bina pati ke rahun…pichle tin sal se main ise jhel rahi hun.

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Scene 1 continue
All the previous scenes are moving before the Pant’s eyes. Having seen the gesture of Pant, Bhandari thinks that Pant is dreaming about his would be wife and he is very happy to think so)
Bhandari
Sahab bibi ke bina jindagi bhi koi jindagi hai.
(Listing Bhandari’s words, Pant realizes his condition. He looks at the face of Bhandari in order to understand his mental condition if he is really happy after marriage)
Pant
Kitane din huye tumahari shadi ke?

Bhandari

(with hesitation) sahab… do sal.
Pant
Kaya usane tumhe kabhi aisa kaha hai ki woh pichale do sal se tumhe jhel rahi hai?
Bhandari
(in a state of confusion) main samajha nahi sahab.
Pant
Tumahari bibi tumase kabhi jhagra karati hai ?
Bhandari
Shabib ab miya-bibi me to thori –bahut nok-jhonk hote hi rahati hai.
Pant
Abhi tin sal nahi huye hai.
Bhandari
Kaya matlab?
Pant

Kuch nahi…. tum jao, mera bed per jane ka samay ho gaya hai.

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जारी रहेगा..........